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Cavewoman
Joined: 06 Sep 2005
Posts: 2056
Location: nearby
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Working With Michelle
A woman strolls the edge of my reality
sliding pregnant glances down the counter to my work.
I wait for her in dreams
anticipating her old grey truck
searching caution to find free wind
and ample air.
Fullness hovers with each breath ...
concentration wavers - stops - comes full round'bout
...watching and wanting
the boldly strolling woman.
My brain sighs no
my heart anguishes in yes.
She possesses my attention
concrete image nor thought exist.
I must remind myself to blink
in the hunt for an unknown, timeless place
where desire can gorge in feasting need.
Ballerinas spin - arms wide with delicate hands
inviting, begging, offering
undiscovered dawn's lazy breathless afternoon
stretching into touch. _________________ " The sorcerers in life are created within each of us" --- Lynn V. Andrews
Last edited by Cavewoman on Tue Feb 03, 2009 12:41 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Fri Jan 23, 2009 1:13 pm |
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DanceofSorrows
Joined: 29 Aug 2004
Posts: 2837
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(((Cave)))
You don't know how happy it makes me feel to see you posting poems again. This line : searching caution to find free wind and ample air... Stopped me in my tracks. My heart jumped in that line for my own reasons. To me, a significant feeling in this poem is a deep longing for newness, almost a wonderment felt in the heart again. Rather than the object of emotion as being significant, the deep longing is touched as being real. I love when others or something invokes something deep within me...that I have to discover my own feelings through it.
Dance~
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Sat Jan 24, 2009 2:34 pm |
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MysteryGirl
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Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
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Cave.............I read this yesterday and felt unable at the time to post, for some reason then the piece vaguely unsettled me for no seeming good reason. I came back to it today and immediately found the source of my unease in two lines that seemed to be bolded for me alone.
So, forgive me is I dont comment on the work overall, instead say
My brain sighs no
my heart anguishes in yes.
sigh..............yes, I know this emotion.
So good to see you around again.
HugZ, Noni _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
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Sat Jan 24, 2009 10:50 pm |
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Cavewoman
Joined: 06 Sep 2005
Posts: 2056
Location: nearby
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thanks ladies ... its interesting the lines you found most striking ... they are where the write began ....
also interesting are your comments ... i am in the middle of both
that said ... its GOOD to be writing again! _________________ " The sorcerers in life are created within each of us" --- Lynn V. Andrews
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Sat Jan 24, 2009 11:25 pm |
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Aphrodite
Joined: 04 Oct 2005
Posts: 566
Location: Hot Springs Ar
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My sweet Cave. How I have missed your words.
Loving memory of you,
Aph _________________ I have no fear
fear is the mind killer
I will face my fear, I will let it pass through me
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Mon Jan 26, 2009 4:54 am |
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Cavewoman
Joined: 06 Sep 2005
Posts: 2056
Location: nearby
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hey APH! .. hello yourself... i'm picking up speed on my healthy return to Mel's ... Jjjjuuuuuussst about there... good to hear from you too... thanks _________________ " The sorcerers in life are created within each of us" --- Lynn V. Andrews
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Mon Jan 26, 2009 1:11 pm |
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MdmPrez
Joined: 16 Oct 2007
Posts: 803
Location: US of A
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Cave
She's back and she's better than ever!!!
So good to see you here.
Cat
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Mon Jan 26, 2009 5:42 pm |
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Eilidh
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Joined: 09 Apr 2005
Posts: 1880
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Cave,
It's great to see you writing again.
I hope to read more from you soon.
~Eilidh
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Mon Jan 26, 2009 9:46 pm |
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Cavewoman
Joined: 06 Sep 2005
Posts: 2056
Location: nearby
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HEY ladies! ... thank you for the warm welcome...
see you in chat ? _________________ " The sorcerers in life are created within each of us" --- Lynn V. Andrews
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Tue Jan 27, 2009 12:57 am |
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