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shark attack on my heart attack (unfinished)
being with you is easy,
swimming freely in the sea,
i am just the water,
and you're the love inside of me.
gliding through the waves,
simply day to day,
hunting for some prey,
and i pray that it's not me.
it feels like a shark attack,
on the inside of my heart,
attack of my soul,
attack!
being with you is easy,
and i want it to grow,
into something more complex,
into something good to show.
(this poem is lame isn't it? someone help me with some advice here please. or perhaps you like it? either way, leave a comment if you wish.)
Mon Aug 10, 2009 8:25 pm
Xalia1 Moderators
Joined: 05 May 2004
Posts: 3702
Location: In love
I don't think this is lame at all!
Actually, I love the simplicity and easy flow of it.
Especially the lines:
I am just the water
and you're the love inside of me.
Good job chickie!
Hella Hugs,
Xalia _________________ Nobody said life would be easy...They just promised it would be worth it.
~♥♥~
~The words fail me.. because what I feel for you is beyond description...~
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