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Fucking Liars [Language Warning]
We are liars
Fucking liars
Fucking carnal, feral lunatics
Slick kisses mixing rich and wicked
Fingers lifting, slipping, gripping
Fucking liars
Grasping, flipping
Ripping supple hips
And tripping
Falling nipples-first and skinning
Chins on stubbled mounds
And wishing
All of this
Was only this
Liars
Fucking liars
Fucking hips and hands and knees
Prying open lips and cheeks
Bucking, thrusting, thick with pleas
Pleading, pleading, Oh, the pleading
Fucking liars
Hissing breathing
Seething past politely needing
Instinctively demanding teeth and
Hungered tongue at frantic feeding
Liars! Fucking Liars!
WE ARE FUCKING BREEDING
Steaming through the panicked reeling
Threatened, fevered, through the feeling
The reeling…
The feeling…
The dreaming...
…
We are tendered then, and gentle, rendered
Vulnerable and sweet
Too flexible, but culpable
And desperate to believe
That this
Was only this
We are liars
Fucking liars
We want the lie too much
Liberated through the carnal,
Progressive in our lust
We want to be absolved of touch
Freed of all that follows, thus,
We are the most
Endangered species
Our fucking causes love _________________ -
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"...a soul that wakes up to find itself wandering, unwanted, between the spheres."
Mon Nov 23, 2009 7:46 pm
MysteryGirl Moderators
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Location: I come from a land downunder
ae,, you make me weep woman. All that buildup, all that heat and anger and frustration, then...............the last line
Our fucking causes love
HugZ, MG _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
Mon Nov 23, 2009 11:34 pm
ae
Joined: 17 Sep 2006
Posts: 1025
Location: that tragic backwater, the gulf coast of florida
Thank you, Noni.
Don't you just hate that part? I mean, not of the poem, but of being human?
The other critters that have recreational sex don't seem to have to rationalize and delude themselves about having a jolly good roll in the hay.
Instinct is a bitch, but it keeps us from eating our young... or our mates!
(Well, considering the venue, perhaps I should rephrase that ...) _________________ -
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"...a soul that wakes up to find itself wandering, unwanted, between the spheres."
Tue Nov 24, 2009 12:36 am
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
god dang, this would be a perfect punk/metal lyric. especially done really fast. i think i got it down. this is the bomb. if i was in a punk band id ask you if i could use this as a song. perhaps its a little too meaningful to be punk, but either way it rocks. i like this shit, dude. it made me excited. it's not often that other people's work excites me. thanks very much for being consistently awesome and exciting.
Tue Nov 24, 2009 6:48 am
GreenEyedKiss Moderators
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Fucking love it!
Green _________________ "I don't know what I'm doing, but I'm getting it done." ~ADM
"What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others remains immortal"
Tue Nov 24, 2009 9:44 pm
EverydayAngelKarie
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Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
i kept thinking about this poem last night after getting offline, and then again when i was in my class today, and i needed to read it again as soon as i got home. there's something special about this poem. i really love it. i know i already commented but i needed to comment again.
Wed Nov 25, 2009 12:07 am
brachingritualz
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There is not even anything i can say outside of expletives and this understated icon _________________ shemovesme.wordpress.com
Fri Nov 27, 2009 4:12 pm
Eilidh Moderators
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Interesting perspective, ae.
You always make me think.
~Eilidh
Sun Nov 29, 2009 4:58 am
SharkFinGirl
Joined: 17 Feb 2008
Posts: 20
yes yes yes!
this is mucho good stuff.
thank you.
Mon Nov 30, 2009 4:27 am
WonderWhy
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Posts: 244
I have come back to read this several times now, and I'm trying to think of a reply that does it justice...
hmmm
Wed Dec 16, 2009 12:25 pm
MysteryGirl Moderators
Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
Thanks for bumping this back up again WW. I don't think I have ever revisited a piece as often as this, or read somethng aloud as much. I don't think there IS a lot you can say as a comment to tell the truth, it's all contained in the poem as a whole.
We are liars
Fucking liars
We want the lie too much
Liberated through the carnal,
Progressive in our lust
We want to be absolved of touch
Freed of all that follows, thus,
We are the most
Endangered species
Our fucking causes love
_________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
Wed Dec 16, 2009 11:45 pm
MysteryGirl Moderators
Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
I's been 1 year exactly since this unbelievable bit of work was posted and I'm going to bump it to the top again because it damn well deserves it. ae I don't know where you are girl but considering there is virtually NO traffic on the poetry boards of late, I may just have a fest of your old stuff for all those who have missed it. _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
Wed Nov 24, 2010 12:42 am
Xalia1 Moderators
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AE,
I love this! I can't believe I missed it the first go round.
There is so much power and emotion, just wow.
MG - bump it all up chickie! I miss logging on and seeing new stuff every day
Thanks for bringing this back to us!
(((((((((((AE, MG)))))))))))))))))))
Hella Hugs,
Xalia _________________ Nobody said life would be easy...They just promised it would be worth it.
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~The words fail me.. because what I feel for you is beyond description...~
Wed Nov 24, 2010 1:35 am
ae
Joined: 17 Sep 2006
Posts: 1025
Location: that tragic backwater, the gulf coast of florida
I am gobsmacked. (0_o)
I love you guys so much. I can't even believe I've been away so long. I've just been so sick...
Personal notes to certain persons to come...
Noni, you are just everything. You really are.
ae _________________ -
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"...a soul that wakes up to find itself wandering, unwanted, between the spheres."
Mon Dec 20, 2010 9:56 pm
MysteryGirl Moderators
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Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
ae........you are back, could you hear me calling you?
Hugz and healing, MG _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
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