Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
When You're Low
You’re as mobile as a still-life apple
painted badly on canvas.
You’ve got strings,
a liar’s growing nose
and an oaken jaw meant
for nutcracking.
You’re a billion Joules of labor
waffled into strips of poly fibers.
You’re a coyote limping
in front of sparse traffic on a dusted
road in Joshua Tree with a paper plate
hanging from your mouth.
You’re a pillow laid in the sun
for cotton blend comfort.
You’re a derelict
drunk
on desert bushes.
Thu Dec 06, 2012 6:53 am
ae
Joined: 17 Sep 2006
Posts: 1025
Location: that tragic backwater, the gulf coast of florida
Ahhh, me likey, me likey!
EDA, as always, one of my favs. How is your mother, btw?
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"...a soul that wakes up to find itself wandering, unwanted, between the spheres."
Mon Feb 25, 2013 10:25 pm
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
My mother? She;s perfectly fine. Why do you ask Ae? P.s. I've missed your poetry!
Fri Mar 01, 2013 8:06 am
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
And thank you for the read. Glad ya like.
Fri Mar 01, 2013 8:06 am
CindyT
Joined: 09 Nov 2012
Posts: 159
Location: Florida
eak, I do like very much...especially pulling in the desert. But the very best to me is that craving of a persons' energy even though it may ultimately be a negative for you: You’re a billion Joules of labor
waffled into strips of poly fibers.
I love how you wind your words!
CindyT
Fri Mar 01, 2013 1:48 pm
melons Site Admin
Joined: 06 Feb 2004
Posts: 2371
(((((((((EKA))))))))))
I love how you blend and weave these image-rich words. I loved this phrase,
quote:
You’re a pillow laid in the sun
for cotton blend comfort.
Great write, thanks so much for sharing
Luv'n'hugs,
Melx
Fri Mar 01, 2013 11:51 pm
smart_cookie
Joined: 12 Aug 2006
Posts: 2310
Location: USA
Sheeeit. Leave Karie alone for a few minutes and look at the prime stuff she cranks out. Oaken jaw for nutcracking? A paper plate in its mouth? Yer gooood.
Sun Mar 03, 2013 1:15 pm
brachingritualz
Joined: 31 Mar 2007
Posts: 248
gorgeous imagery EDA, thanks for sharing _________________ shemovesme.wordpress.com
Tue Mar 05, 2013 6:27 am
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
thank you, ladies
i really appreciate these comments and am very happy about the specific lines/images you enjoyed. spent a lot of time on this one.
thank you very very much.
<3 always, EDA Karie
Sun Mar 17, 2013 8:46 am
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
Re: (((((((((EKA))))))))))
quote:Originally posted by melons:
I love how you blend and weave these image-rich words. I loved this phrase,
quote:
You’re a pillow laid in the sun
for cotton blend comfort.
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