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smart_cookie
Joined: 12 Aug 2006
Posts: 2310
Location: USA
From The Sky
From the sky--
crows and doves
descended, a gift--
assembling upon
my right shoulder--
my left--
birds who bore cacophony and calm--
finding purchase and place
at each far-stretched arm--
so that, when I sought you,
Goddess of Sky--
Goddess of Earth--
I came to you in pairs--
one part snow,
one part dirt.
Here, for you, my kiss--
partly sweet,
partly salt;
from the sky, I come flocked--
love me now--
love it all.
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Tue Mar 26, 2013 2:56 pm
Roman
Joined: 24 Jun 2005
Posts: 3187
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Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:40 am
MysteryGirl
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Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
Here, for you, my kiss--
partly sweet,
partly salt;
Mmmmm.... the duality of love. Gonna read this one a few times, Cooks. Thanks.
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Wed Mar 27, 2013 10:02 am
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
wonderful, cookie.
this was mostly sweet, little salt overall. haha. i really enjoyed it.
especially this part:
birds who bore cacophony and calm--
finding purchase and place
at each far-stretched arm--
i like the slant rhyming here, and cacophony is always fun to use in a poem, especially the actual word. wonderful. lufrednow! wonderful.
~EDA Karie
Wed Mar 27, 2013 6:57 pm
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