There is a moment when you look at me,
And all other doubts are fleeting.
The heart breaks,
And mends again,
As we depart from what we knew.
There is a moment when you speak,
Your lips forming the fragments of my name,
When all else falls silent.
The bell rings,
The dog barks,
The girl laughs,
But those scattered sounds fall on deaf ears
In the instant that my name is caressed by your voice.
There is a moment when our lips touch
That fills my thoughts.
My speech fails,
My nerve fades,
And we are left with desire between us.
Your arms pull me closer,
Until I can feel your every movement.
Your scent chases my visions of you
That are laced into my every dream.
Sat Jan 26, 2008 3:26 pm
smart_cookie
Joined: 12 Aug 2006
Posts: 2310
Location: USA
Mmm, what is sweeter than hearing one's own name spoken by someone we love? Lilu, I just love your poetry. You capture a moment so well, and fill it with your own very special sensibility.
Hugs,
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Copyright 2005 - 2008 Aoibhegréine
These literary works are my property under copyright. If you wish to use my work for any purpose please ASK FIRST.
Sun Jan 27, 2008 3:21 am
sillywolf
Joined: 09 Jul 2007
Posts: 311
Location: The last frontier
beautiful... taken out of life and put on paper. (well not really... computer, but still )
Silly _________________ Smile. It makes people wonder.
Sun Jan 27, 2008 5:44 am
desert-fish
Joined: 13 Apr 2006
Posts: 2777
Location: deleted
gee why didn't i see this before....that's just beautiful!!
love it
Mon Jan 28, 2008 7:58 am
Rosebud
Joined: 24 Jul 2007
Posts: 164
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Mon Jan 28, 2008 2:03 pm
realwoman
Joined: 05 Dec 2005
Posts: 1040
Location: under our tree in Africa
Re: Moment
quote:Originally posted by lilu1414:
There is a moment when you look at me,
And all other doubts are fleeting.
The heart breaks,
And mends again,
As we depart from what we knew....
Lilu, you touched my heart with these words... sheer brilliance, and how wonderfully you captured that moment
~smiles
Thank you
Hugs
~real _________________ .
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light is to darkness as love is to fear...
Mon Jan 28, 2008 2:57 pm
MdmPrez
Joined: 16 Oct 2007
Posts: 803
Location: US of A
Lilu
This is just heavenly!!!
Cat
Mon Jan 28, 2008 3:51 pm
lilu1414
Joined: 28 Jun 2007
Posts: 109
Thank you!
Sat Feb 02, 2008 4:02 pm
lilu1414
Joined: 28 Jun 2007
Posts: 109
quote:Originally posted by smart_cookie:
Mmm, what is sweeter than hearing one's own name spoken by someone we love? Lilu, I just love your poetry. You capture a moment so well, and fill it with your own very special sensibility.
Cookie
Wow Thanks!
Mon Mar 31, 2008 1:56 am
lilu1414
Joined: 28 Jun 2007
Posts: 109
Re: Moment
quote:Originally posted by realwoman:
quote:Originally posted by lilu1414:
There is a moment when you look at me,
And all other doubts are fleeting.
The heart breaks,
And mends again,
As we depart from what we knew....
Lilu, you touched my heart with these words... sheer brilliance, and how wonderfully you captured that moment
~smiles
Thank you
Hugs
~real
Thank you so much! Wow, I posted this so long ago!
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