Joined: 16 Sep 2005
Posts: 231
Location: Nova Scotia, Canada
Canaan Falls
V1
Paradise is a minefield,
Riddled in little explosions.
Her crooked smile, her narrow eyes,
Her "tiny heart attacks", leave contusions
On my skin.
V2
Dinner's served in an empty bowl,
Little white lies do well to hide your hunger.
Rubber band, extended
To the point of breaking - finding an ending,
Force rebounding,
Cuts my chest.
C1
It's El Dorado that came too soon,
Orphalese has left the room,
Premonition granted, damage done.
She ran a circle 'round the sun,
Hid the dark from everyone,
But the moon's awake now,
here, in her world.
V3
You made your moves
On her neck, and her face.
Without a thought, you told the tale
Of her embrace
And all the while, I stood by and held your hand
I was the water for your wasteland.
C2
It's El Dorado that came too soon
Orphalese has left the room
Premonition granted, damage done.
You ran a circle 'round the sun,
Hid the dark from everyone,
But the moon's awake now,
Here, in your world.
Bridge
But I'll stay
(See if I can take it)
You say
(Mistakes you made don't ave to break it)
Pain it burns white hot and bright,
I hope you have the heart to make this right.
C3
It's El Dorado that came too soon
Orphalese has left the room
Premonition granted, damage done.
You ran a circle 'round the sun,
Hid the dark from everyone,
But the moon's awake now,
Here, in your world.
If only I had stayed in mine.
If only - I'd stayed - In mine. _________________ From the beginning
I knew meeting could only
End in parting, yet
I ignored the coming dawn
And I gave myself to you
-Fujiwara no Teika
Last edited by Kessah on Mon Aug 25, 2008 7:38 pm; edited 2 times in total
Fri Jul 18, 2008 5:34 pm
englishbird
Joined: 02 Oct 2005
Posts: 235
Location: Currently Toronto (formerly Liverpool, UK)
Yup, works for me!! Love it! The lyrics really make me want to listen... i haven't had that feeling in a while, they remind me of TOFU where you can't wait for the next line to see whats gonna be said. It's goosebump material for sure
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Sat Jul 19, 2008 4:16 am
Kessah
Joined: 16 Sep 2005
Posts: 231
Location: Nova Scotia, Canada
thanks ladies! I'll be recording it soon... gotta say, I think it may be the best I've done yet, musically... not to say it's great, but it's about progress, not perfection!
_________________ From the beginning
I knew meeting could only
End in parting, yet
I ignored the coming dawn
And I gave myself to you
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