Joined: 17 Sep 2006
Posts: 1025
Location: that tragic backwater, the gulf coast of florida
Dispossessed
Because whispering ghosts were a terror
Worse than beatings I got from the thieves
Who hijacked my soul for their joyrides,
I came crawling to you for relief.
You drew a fine circle around me
And called me by a new name
Then offered to give me protection
And said you could free me from shame
Fearful and grateful, I promised,
And prayed as you said I must pray
And faithfully swallowed the magic
You said could keep demons at bay.
I paid you up front but did not know
The true price would be slow to come
My dreams are as clay in the desert
My words die as dust on my tongue
No longing dwells now in my spirit
The fear has all drained from my bones
There’s no hurry, no worry nor anger
I don’t care, and don’t care that I don’t
Of course the ghosts do not torment me
As you promised, the demons have left
Having no soul that’s worth stealing
I've stolen the joy from their theft. _________________ -
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"...a soul that wakes up to find itself wandering, unwanted, between the spheres."
Thu Jan 14, 2010 6:41 am
Moonshine
Joined: 16 Jan 2008
Posts: 470
Bloody hell this is fantastic! Absolutely fantastic! Damn but you write well. Shaking my head in awe, this is simply sublime! Structure, content and finale, all *perfect*.
Bloody hell, El
Moo xxx _________________
For once you have tasted flight you will walk the earth with your eyes turned skywards, for there you have been and there you will long to return. --Leonardo da Vinci--
Thu Jan 14, 2010 8:23 am
MysteryGirl Moderators
Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
I seem to be chasing around the boards today behind people who are stealing the comments I want to make! Like Moonie before me, I'm in awe, total awe at how you take mere words and fashion them into a work of art like this. God, I love this, bellissiomo girlfriend.
HugZ, MG _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
Thu Jan 14, 2010 8:33 am
ae
Joined: 17 Sep 2006
Posts: 1025
Location: that tragic backwater, the gulf coast of florida
Moo--
Paradox in paradise, luv. It's so much more difficult without the suffering. So thank you, and thank you, thank you. Only you know.
El _________________ -
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"...a soul that wakes up to find itself wandering, unwanted, between the spheres."
Thu Jan 14, 2010 7:15 pm
brachingritualz
Joined: 31 Mar 2007
Posts: 248
"As you promised, the demons have left
Having no soul that’s worth stealing
I've stolen the joy from their theft."
Mmmm, I have missed the potency of your poetry AE, this was a delicious and desolate treat. Thanks _________________ shemovesme.wordpress.com
Wed May 26, 2010 12:53 am
Xalia1 Moderators
Joined: 05 May 2004
Posts: 3702
Location: In love
AE,
Wow...
I felt every line, deeply.
I loved this.
Thank you, as always your writing rocks.
Hugs,
Xalia _________________ Nobody said life would be easy...They just promised it would be worth it.
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~The words fail me.. because what I feel for you is beyond description...~
Wed May 26, 2010 12:41 pm
DanceofSorrows
Joined: 29 Aug 2004
Posts: 2837
This is very deep Ae. To me it is a declaration of freedom while walking through an unfamiliar, emotional territory...not barren and yet forcing attention to the details of new surroundings. I really feel in my own interpreation of this poem, that it is the feeling of deep growth, felt within the core of the soul. Hugs
Dance~
Thu May 27, 2010 6:03 pm
Cavewoman
Joined: 06 Sep 2005
Posts: 2056
Location: nearby
whoa!!!!!
extremely well said m'am!!!
_________________ " The sorcerers in life are created within each of us" --- Lynn V. Andrews
Tue Jun 01, 2010 3:59 am
MysteryGirl Moderators
Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
BUMP _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
Thu Nov 25, 2010 9:32 am
simply
Joined: 14 Apr 2007
Posts: 180
Hello AE, Gorgeous write.....Thank You _________________ ....Take Care....
Tue Dec 07, 2010 10:19 am
MysteryGirl Moderators
Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
BUMP.... another one for CIndy T. to savour.
HugZ, MG _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
Wed Jan 15, 2014 9:28 am
CindyT
Joined: 09 Nov 2012
Posts: 159
Location: Florida
My hat off to MG for this bump up as well. ae, what can I say? I can say that I love your words...everything I've ever read... drunk on life... moving forward living a life completely stripped of inhibitions... feeling good again and first. Loved it ae!!!!
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