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Secondly...Everything I say is my own personal opinion and it is only my opinion about this poem and has nothing to do with you personally at all.
That is a very very well done and well thought out poem. Very nice.
The only thing that slightly messed with the very nice flow of this poem is this line...
"The room not a single bit more clear..."
Perhaps if you removed "single" and added "was" between "room" and "not"
That is just one possibility.
Nice poem
Hugs,
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