My thoughts are of another time-
lost long ago in the day's long night.
To time before this callous moment,
smoothered with the words you throw, slipping so easliy from your grasp.
They fly like fists, in the back alley of a darkened underground-
and I catch them all-
hard against my whitened flesh,
feeling their sting deep in my bones,
wondering why they come so fast-
and why I can't stop them.
My soul breaks up into tiny pieces- splintering into shards of broken stained glass,
then float- to the surface
of my see-through skin.
I am not able to hide my doubts as you are.
Fear is written across me with a thick, black Sharpie pen.
Fear
not of the words you spurt but of losing you to their power.
It hurts.
to see your eyes glaze over with a dense hatred of me,
knowing how much love you hold in your bruised up heart.
I try to remember that-
I focus my diluted eyes
on the beautiful smile that you give to me so freely,
most of the time.
I try to remember-
that you don't mean what you say
to hurt me.
I am shoved into this wall with your force because there is no control.
Sometimes you can't stop the flow of all the pain-
still left inside.
The pigmentation still stains your fingertips to remind you of that.
The colors,
remind me
that you are still just a lost little girl-
searching for love.
-Alicia Nicole Adams
2005
Sun Feb 24, 2008 11:05 am
Beth
Joined: 01 Jan 2008
Posts: 336
Location: Michigan
I think this is a great write - you've captured painful feelings and brought them to the light - excellent metaphors and movement takes the reader into this experience and showers them with remains of great sadness you have now cast aside now that you've written it down you will be able to abide
Be strong - if this is just a poem it is good - if it is happening -please don't lose yourself to this person - life is meant to be peaceful and serene - being alone is worth it at times like this
I send you my prayer and know that you are not alone
Beth _________________ StarGazer
Sun Feb 24, 2008 4:29 pm
anaflyby9
Joined: 09 Feb 2008
Posts: 2
quote:Originally posted by Beth:
I think this is a great write - you've captured painful feelings and brought them to the light - excellent metaphors and movement takes the reader into this experience and showers them with remains of great sadness you have now cast aside now that you've written it down you will be able to abide
Be strong - if this is just a poem it is good - if it is happening -please don't lose yourself to this person - life is meant to be peaceful and serene - being alone is worth it at times like this
I send you my prayer and know that you are not alone
Beth
Star-
Thanks for your feed back, it's nice to recieve your views!...and don't worry, yes, this poem was based on a life experience but time has healed all of that wound and now it is just a past pain that has become a blossom of beautiful words. Thank you for your prayers!
This is a very nice poem and I have to agree with Beth...you have captured some painful feeling and did a good job of it. It is wonderful to know that this pain you experienced is in the past and no longer fills your days.
in the third line of the poem you said "To time before this callous moment," Perhaps you mean "To a time before this callous moment,"
Hugs you tight,
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