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An Example Of Bad Love Poetry
Your name
is the arrogant back
of a hand, manicured
with dirt and cement.
Your future
is the fall of Rome,
and the backstabbing
of sheep and wolves.
Your luck
is the calculated gamble
you made when you chose
free liquor over chips.
Your love
is the fishtailing car on the road,
not quite regaining control, and launching
over the sea-cliffs free of a guard rail.
My name is your future,
your luck is bleeding alive,
our love is dog-paddling,
and I am no longer struggling to survive.
(felt like i needed to write a semi-angry poem. like it?)
Last edited by EverydayAngelKarie on Sat Aug 13, 2011 11:12 am; edited 1 time in total
Sat Aug 13, 2011 1:18 am
brachingritualz
Joined: 31 Mar 2007
Posts: 248
I beg to differ with the title as this is a quite beautiful example of love poetry and the angrier the better in my opinion _________________ shemovesme.wordpress.com
Sat Aug 13, 2011 2:35 am
MysteryGirl Moderators
Joined: 02 Jun 2007
Posts: 3419
Location: I come from a land downunder
Less angry I think, than sharp edged and sucinct. Oh, I like this EDA.
our love is dog-paddling,
and I am no longer struggling to survive
HugZ, MG [/b] _________________ Be yourself.............everybody else is taken!
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