Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
Your Greys Your Grays Your Graze Your Grace
Yeah, I’ve got the pictures in my head,
but I want to see so much more
of your skin.
More than the microscopic freckles
pouring across your forehead
and the tens of moles
cascading down your nose.
More than the scars on your wrists,
from when you were fourteen
and as tragic as the acting on TGIF.
More than the pigment,
a medium of pine
and gold.
More than the stretchmarks
that I see invisible.
All the places you’ve been,
rivers of skin to map.
A body atlas that highlights the curves
I’d like to travel.
(early draft, not really complete but i'd like to know what people think of it. thanks)
EDA Karie
Fri Feb 07, 2014 8:08 pm
CindyT
Joined: 09 Nov 2012
Posts: 159
Location: Florida
This may just become something (or two or three somethings) very different than the feelings/thoughts/images you began with....
CindyT
Sun Feb 16, 2014 11:57 pm
brachingritualz
Joined: 31 Mar 2007
Posts: 248
that's effing beautiful Karie. I think its good as is..... _________________ shemovesme.wordpress.com
Fri Mar 21, 2014 6:12 am
EverydayAngelKarie
Joined: 07 Mar 2007
Posts: 761
Location: Lakewood, CA
Thank you both. I have since edited the poem and it was just published in a large anthology. Your comments did help me fix ghis one up so thank you.
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